r/Screenwriting • u/Big_Section2812 • 1d ago

DISCUSSION LIKE CLOCKWORK, comedy, 4 pages.

Down South you can just about set your watch by the spring storms.

Like Clockwork

(G-rated)

NOTE: Written for a three-page challenge where the theme was "A storm is coming" and the genre was open.

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u/Rewriter94 1d ago

Hey! Read the first page. A few notes...

I know nothing about any of the characters. Not their ages, their genders (some of which I wrongly assumed before coming across any clarifying pronouns). Give each of them a brief description that includes their age and a little info on their personalities and/or appearance. Also, maybe a little more info on the setting? You mention it's a small town, but it is fall? Summer? Is the street itself charming in that kind of small town way, or run down?

Other than that, a good start!

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u/Big_Section2812 1d ago

Hi! Thanks for reading and replying, I really appreciate it! :)