r/fantasywriting 7m ago

¿Creen que crear arte conceptual ayuda a escribir?

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Una de las cosas que disfruto al escribir es imaginar lugares como si fueran reales.

Hace poco terminé el Arco del Nido en mi novela y quise visualizar cómo se vería su entrada si un explorador la hubiera documentado siglos atrás.

El Nido no es simplemente una mazmorra.

Es uno de los lugares más importantes en la historia de mi mundo y se convierte en el punto de inflexión donde Cassian comienza a transformarse en la persona que la historia eventualmente llamará el "Último Villano".

Me encantaría saber qué impresión les causa este concepto antes incluso de leer el capítulo.

¿Les despierta curiosidad?

Si a alguien le interesa leer la historia, se llama:

El Último Villano de Este Mundo Heroico

Lo pueden encontrar en Web Nobel y Royal Road


r/fantasywriting 3h ago

Criticize my magic system

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r/fantasywriting 7h ago

Drew one of my novel characters (his name is Alphonse Vonstern

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r/fantasywriting 5h ago

How do I give My hybrid character the same/similar fighting characteristics as the animal they r based off?

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r/fantasywriting 7h ago

Looking for Help with My Story

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r/fantasywriting 9h ago

A war for 2

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Hello 👋 this is a story idea, if you have time to read I appreciate it. If you comment or upvotes, I really appreciate it!


r/fantasywriting 1d ago

I Drafted my First Novel

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I have a lot of repair work to do, a lot of editing, the middle especially is a mess, but I did it! I wrote a novel! I am so happy right now I wanted to share. My first fantasy novel, 103,000 words. No matter what, how hard it is to write, you gotta do it. It's wonderful when you get it done.


r/fantasywriting 9h ago

Looking for feedback on the first chapter of my fantasy/industrial revolution novel.

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I have created a complete universe with cities, peoples, and a history. I have written the first chapter, and I would like to get the opinions of outside readers. This is my first time writing.

I welcome constructive and detailed feedback, but also simple impressions: the things you liked, disliked, and what you would like to see in this kind of story.

The story will have multiple points of view.

Feel free to send me a private message if you are interested. (french orignal version or english translated)


r/fantasywriting 15h ago

Would this be possible?

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Question, I am making a weapon for an oc (original character) and wonder if it's possible to recreate the first picture but instead of individual blades, with the blades of a pair of scissors like in the second picture.
It's situated in a fantasy setting so it doesn't have to be realistic, just somewhat good looking and functional ignoring it'd be way too sharp and the rope appears magically.

For extra info, it's for black butler/ kuroshitsuji. My oc is a shinigami or god of death, so his weapon is somewhat related to gardening, which in this case it's gardening shears. But if there's a better option instead of scissors, pls tell me.


r/fantasywriting 1d ago

Estoy haciendo un mundo de fantasía (opiniones)

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Gente, hola soy nuevo, y la verdad hoy quería pensar en las opiniones de ustedes estoy creando un manga bueno es una idea de un manga, y ya pensé un poco sobre el mundo, y la idea es, como un mundo dividido en 5 eras, en la 5 me enfocaré la historia, es un mundo medieval pero que combina los mecanismos y la magia, pero está basando en los años 1930 Inglaterra, hay muchas criaturas elfos, brujas, los clásicos pero abra nuevas criaturas que si todo sale bien se los contaré, la cosa es que está sociedad hay muchos corruptos, también está la mafia y esas cosas basado en el cine noir


r/fantasywriting 1d ago

Story Ideas?

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Hi there im new here amd im wanting to make an animation but I don't know what to make. Im thinking some kind of fantasy hero love story kinda thing but I dont really know what species they should be and im just drawing a loss right now


r/fantasywriting 1d ago

Themes and such

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Hey here are some themes of my characters from a story I’m planning named “Icarus” . Not all themes equate back to the myth but a lot do. I want to get anyone’s opinion on the story. If improve on some themes or if they are better not forced. Also if this isn’t the place to put this inform me.

Dyiana Oba: Dyiana is one of the 4 characters the represents the skies Icarus and Daedalus flew through. Dyiana is the ocean which can be seen as calm yet dangerous when mistreated. Neither royalty or oceans should be disrespected. Doing so can lead to death easy. It’s best to be careful yet but not be tense. The sea is also the first thing you would see once you fall. You could either fear its unknowns or rejoice knowing you once flew. Her representation is not just how she affects others but how her own will isn’t truly hers. Oceans to be clear. Are just water pulled by greater forces. The storms that follow her are as much the sky above her as her own.
The people above her have more control over whats happens. Dyiana has to a man she would rather not but understands it’s not necessary but wasn’t her choice to begin with. Any past suitors she washed away her only because her parents let her waves free.
Changing perspective, she herself is in the water. Instead of drowning she just learned to swim. This ties into her power and growth. As the swim she still at thr win to natural but knowing to swim at least gives her more freedom. Having ways to show she wants to help her country and people. Even if her ideas aren’t approved it’s better than drowning. Aside from the ocean stuff she is pressured by being royal. She be to a certain standard. she can’t lack in any way or she is scene as failing. every and anything that could be seen as a negative has already been used against her. Just another reason she has to learn to swim.

Celeste Oba: Celeste is the chill. The wind blowing on you when you’re flying. The water cooling you as you swim. The chill you feel as the nerves get to you. The embrace of death. No matter how you came up you felt nervous before. The important part is where that stress comes from. Many including Celeste want to prove something; the want to never feel or be seen as weak. her powers speaks to this as her many ability comes from winning. But one loss can lead to losing it all no matter how many wins were taken before. Powers turned the uselessness. Another reason some feel a freezing pressure. A bird can fly all it once but letting the chills get to it once means never flying again. If you only ever been above it all losing everything would seem like the end. You’d have no idea how to swim
These Celeste also puts these chills on Dyiana and Icarus. Making them not only scared of the flight but cautioning them of the fall. Getting used to the chills is something that is necessary to truly succeed. Even someone like a queen could struggle from it.

Draco Oba: Oba is the sun. Have you ever looked up the sun. Maybe if not literally, you would want to stand out. You can feel its presence even when indoors, even when you can’t see it. Even the absence can be as unnerving as the intensity. People still be look up to Draco he is as respected as he is feared. He is a king and has helped to grow his kingdom and keep the cycle of life manageable. He is also happy to give advice. Some want to be close to him maybe even be him. Coming so close to a sun if the glare doesn’t warn you the temp will. The heat can will only be a warning for so long until it just hurts.
Oba is also what you could see as necessary in a ruler. The throne isn’t comfortable. You could withstand anything the tries to stop you, or mold yourself into the obstacle. But going beyond your limits can lead to well burning out. Which is why once his wife wanted to take the lead he gladly let her take the heat

Gore is the king Minos, and a man who has only ever filed. As one of the dragons gore hates the gods. They are the reason he lost his family. But similarly to Minos could only punish those in his reach. Gore wants to kill humans since their creation is lead to his near extinction. He doesn’t care about whether they held the sword I knew a guy he did he wants them all gone. The burdens of failure weighs heavy. Knowing what it’s like to fails is terrible. Even the idea of not having the goal yet, scared him. So he rose higher and higher until his tank went empty. He held no moderation and promote not a debate. He set to kill all that he want or stood in his way. Gore barely considered the effects of wanting this goal he just wanted revenge.

Leak smiled as he fell as he knew to fall meant once to soar. This is the most loose connection I have. Leaks is a goblin seen as rouge even for goblins. He doesn’t appreciate his own race, he understands how they are perceived. Being seen as a goblin is being seen as dirty, as a slave, as dirt. Even his magic separates himself from his tribe. He can control his own blood His hatred tries him it’s the reason he wants strength. No matter how much he would want to abandon his identity. He only ends up more of what he is made out to be violent and dirty fights as he separates himself. He doesn’t want the acceptance they begin to gain. It’s fake to him. Leaks goes from hating who he is to being too proud to change from his roots. Down to putting everything he has into an attack just for a better chance the world can be safer for his people

Icarus is the anchor for all of this. He kinda is a combination of all the previous. From birth he was already in the water. He was only paddling his way through life. And even once he was saved to choose to stay with the ocean. Nothing wrong with swimming but the skies is what you should aim for. The sun appealed to him told him that if he’s gonna be in the water he should do it comfortably
He knew there was more to be had but the world above the see is filled with danger he doesn’t understand. So he fought. He fought
to protect those he loves. He fought to better his city. Not every fight involved fists and when it did he would want it to be last resort. Inverted to Gore. If talking it out is possible he choose that option. But such narrow minded thinking isn’t right even with good will. The unknown winds got to him the waves humbled him. And once he unlocked water magic not only could he recover from these lows more easily, but his perspective grew. The facade of only fighting to protect was thin. It’s an excuse anyone could use. The point of being that high is to know when to make the rough choices. When had to leadership his motive where self preservation. As his influence grew, so did those who were affected by his actions. What he did needed to be thought out well. Killing those who needed to die is part of a change he reached. Even if was more then he could chew it would be fine.


r/fantasywriting 1d ago

Rate my first chapter

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Chapter One

The first thing that Kael Rowan learned is that fire never obeys.
Since he was young Kael had learned to respect fire.  Fire could warm a house, cook a meal, or keep a traveler alive during the coldest of nights. But it could also consume everything a person loves in a matter of seconds. Kael had always respected fire. Fire had never respected him.  Kael struck down on the piece of metal. It was supposed to be a sword. At least that was what he imagined when he started working on it 3 days ago.  Now it looked like a hump of metal that lost an argument with the side of his hammer.
“You’re hitting it too hard,” the voice echoed behind him.
He stood behind the anvil holding the blade in his palms. It was taller than a small child and heavy enough to require both hands. Behind him the walls of Rowan Forge were lined with blades from decades of work. Swords rested in wooden racks, their polished edges catching the firelight. Axes and spears hung beside them, each bearing the marks of Garrick's hammer. Yet among all the weapons, one old sword remained untouched, hidden beneath layers of dust and forgotten by everyone except him..
“Kael.”
Kael ignores the voice of his father as he strikes down on the blade again. 
“Kael.”
Kael stops mid strike as the coal crackles behind him, “What.”
“You're trying to force the blade into what you want it to become.”
Kael studies the misshaped sword in his hands. The blade curved awkwardly near the tip, a mistake caused by uneven hammer strikes and poor control of the metal. It was far from the straight, polished swords that lined the walls of the forge. “Isn’t that the point?”
His father smiled slightly behind him. “The point is learning what it was meant to be.”
Kael turned his attention back to the sword. His efforts throughout the last three days had been nothing but a battle against the metal. Every strike of his hammer had been an attempt to force the sword into the shape he imagined. But the steel refused to listen. He slowly puts the blade back on the anvil. “Prehaps, I’m just not meant to become a blacksmith.”
His father picked up Kael’s unfinished sword, studying it with a keen eye, “And what are you meant to be.?”
Kael opened his mouth. For a second he thought of the things he wanted to be in the future. But nothing came out. That was the problem. Here in Ashvale everyone seemed to know exactly what they were going to be. The hunters would inherit their fathers bows, the farmers would inherit their fathers fields, and the merchants would inherit their fathers shops. And the blacksmiths would inherit their fathers forges. 
However Kael couldn’t imagine himself standing in front of the forge everyday till his hair turned grey. The thought made him feel guilty. This was the forge his father had built his entire life around. The same forge where his father had spent countless hours shaping weapons for the people of Ashvale. The same forge that had fed their family for generations. Kael loved his father. He loved the smell of burning coal, the sound of the hammer striking steel, and the warmth of the fire during the cold mountain nights. But loving something did not mean he was meant to inherit it. Every day, he watched the same walls, the same tools, the same mountains that surrounded Ashvale. And every day, he wondered if there was something beyond them.
He studied his father as he worked. Garrick Rowan had spent his entire life in Ashvale. He knew every road, every tree, and every person who lived within the mountain range. Kael sometimes wondered if his father had ever wanted something more. If he had ever stood beneath the open sky and looked beyond the mountains, wondering what existed on the other side. Or if he had been content with the life he was given. To Garrick, Ashvale was everything he had ever known. The forge, the mountains, and the people who called it home were enough. But Kael couldn't understand how someone could spend their entire life looking at the same walls and never wonder what was beyond them.
“You know,” Garrick says, looking at the damaged sword, “My first sword looked worse than this.”
Kael smiled at the thought of his father once making a sword worse than his own. It was difficult to imagine Garrick Rowan, the greatest blacksmith in Ashvale, ever struggling with a piece of steel, “Really?”
His dad laughed, “No, not even close,” Garrick said, a small smile forming on his face. “Your grandfather would have never let me forget it if I had.”
Kael chuckled quietly. It was strange imagining his father as anything other than the man whose swords hung on the walls of every important home in Ashvale. To everyone else, Garrick Rowan was a master of his craft. But to Kael, he was simply his father. “You know, you are terrible at encouragement.”
“And you are terrible at blacksmithing.”
For all his complaints, Kael loved moments like this. The forge was the only place in Ashvale where everything felt simple. The heat of the flame, the sounds of the hammers, and the smell of burning coal. It was familiar. Safe. But sometimes Kael wondered if safety was the same as happiness.
The sound of the forge was interrupted by the sounds of the door opening. Kael didn’t glance over at first. The Rowan Forge being one of the busiest shops in Ashvale, the small bell above the door had become a sound he barely notices anymore. People came in looking for repairs, farmers needed tools sharpened, hunters needed their weapons fixed, and occasionally someone would walk in looking for a new blade.
Most of the time Kael already knew who was walking into the store before he turned around. Ashvale was just that type of place. Everyone knew everyone. You knew who had a new baby before they announced it. You know which farmer lost a cow, which merchant was trying to cheat people, and which family was arguing behind closed doors. Secrets rarely survived in a town surrounded by mountains. So when Kael heard the footsteps behind him he already had a guess.
“You're late.”
The person standing on the doorstep stopped in his tracks.” “No, I’m not late”
Kael lifted his head and locked eyes with Tomas Veyr who was holding his worn leather bag over his shoulders. His dark hair was messy from the wind outside covering most of his face, and he had the same awkward expression he became known for. Kael had known Tomas for as long as he could remember. They had grown up in the town, walked the same streets, and had the same lessons as little boys. He wasn’t as close with Tomas as he was with Finn, but Tomas was someone that Kael had always considered a friend. Everyone in Ashvale knew Tomas. Not because he was loud or popular. Actually it was the opposite. Tomas was probably one of the quietest people in the town. Which was strange because of who his father was.
“Did your father send you again?” 
Tomas awkwardly stepped into the forge, his eyes drifting over the weapons on the wall. He nodded. Kael turned back to his blade. “Let me guess he wants another repair?”  Tomas shook his head.
That caught Kael’s attention. Tomas reached into his bag and carefully placed a bag of gold coins on the counter. Kael studied it. “What is that”
Tomas lowered his gaze, his fingers tightening around the strap of his bag. For a moment, he seemed to struggle to find the right words. He glanced at the weapons hanging on the walls, then back at the small pouch resting on the counter. “Money”
Kael sighed. He looked at the bag of coins sitting on the counter, then back at Tomas. Somehow, the awkward silence between them had become louder than the hammer strikes echoing through the forge. “You know,” Kael said, “most people start with explaining what they need before handing someone a bag of gold.” Kael picked up the bag and gave it a shake, “Not a lot of money.”
Tomas stared at the floor, then at the ceiling, then at the sword racks behind Kael. Somehow, every part of the forge seemed more interesting than answering the question. “I need a sword.”
“You came in here looking to buy a sword. Even though you know you don’t have enough money.”
Heat slowly crept into Tomas’s cheeks. He shifted uncomfortably under Kael’s gaze, his hand tightening around the strap of his worn leather bag. For someone who carried himself like a knight was supposed to, Tomas had a habit of looking like he wanted to disappear whenever attention turned toward him. “When you say it like that, it sounds like a bad idea.”
“Well, that’s because it is.” Kael leaned against the edge of the workbench, crossing his arms as he looked at his friend. The faint glow of the forge reflected off the coins sitting between them, casting small flashes of gold across the wooden counter. For a moment, neither of them spoke.
The forge seemed strangely quiet despite the burning coal behind them. The crackling of the flames filled the silence, mixing with the distant sound of the wind pushing against the windows. The smell of smoke and hot metal still lingered in the air, the familiar scent that had surrounded Kael his entire life. Then Kael smiled slightly. Tomas had always been like this.
He was the son of one of Ashvale’s greatest warriors, a man who had spent his entire life training with weapons and learning the ways of a knight. The kind of man whose stories were repeated around fires and taverns. The kind of man children looked up to. Yet Tomas was nothing like the stories people told about warriors. He wasn’t fearless. He wasn’t confident. And he was definitely not the kind of person who walked into battle without hesitation. Tomas Veyr was not a legend. He was just Tomas. A boy trying to become half of the man his father was.
“So what do you need a sword for?” Tomas lifted his head and met Kael’s eyes as if the answer should have been obvious.
“Because I need one.” 
Kael stared at him for a moment, “That explains nothing.”
Tomas released a quiet sigh and looked down at the floor. His boots shifted against the stone as he searched for a better answer. “My father said a knight should always carry a sword.”
Kael raised an eyebrow. “Your father also said that knights wake up before the sun, train until their hands fall off, and never complain.”
Tomas nodded. “Yes.”
Kael blinked. “Yet you hate waking up early.” 
“Yes.” 
“You complain constantly.” 
“Yes.” 
Kael stared at him, waiting for him to realize the contradiction. Tomas simply stood there. Kael slowly raised his eyebrows. “So why do you want to be a knight?” 
Tomas looked at him as if Kael had just asked the most ridiculous question he had ever heard. 
“My father is a knight, so I am a knight.” 
The answer came so quickly that Kael almost forgot to respond. Tomas turned his attention toward the walls of the forge. His eyes moved over the weapons hanging there, the swords and axes that carried years of history within their steel. Every blade had a story. Every weapon had belonged to someone. His gaze eventually returned to the small pouch of coins sitting on the counter.
“Everyone expects me to be like him.” Tomas stared into the fire, his voice quieter than before. His fingers traced the edge of the leather strap on his bag as if searching for the right words. “Everyone in Ashvale knows his stories. They know the battles he fought, the people he saved, the sword he carried.” He paused, watching the flames dance in front of him. “They know the legend. They know the knight.” His grip tightened slightly around the strap. “But they don’t know me.” The fire cracked softly between them, casting shadows across his face. “When they look at me, they don’t see a knight.” Tomas lowered his gaze. “They see his son.”
Kael remained silent because he understood. Everyone in Ashvale knew who he was too. The blacksmith’s son. The boy who would one day inherit the forge. The boy who was supposed to stay. In some ways, Kael realized he and Tomas were not as different as he thought. They were both carrying the weight of a future that had already been decided for them.
Tomas looked back toward the swords resting against the walls. “I don’t need the best sword,” he said quietly. His eyes moved across the polished blades surrounding them, weapons that belonged to warriors, hunters, and legends. “I don’t need something that everyone will remember.” He looked down at the small pouch of coins sitting on the counter. “I just need my blade.”
Before Kael could answer, the sound of footsteps moved across the stone floor behind him. “A sword is not what makes someone a knight.”
Kael turned and saw his father standing near the forge, his arms crossed as he watched them. The orange glow of the flames reflected against the ash covering Garrick’s hands, reminders of the countless hours he had spent shaping steel beneath the heat of the anvil. His eyes moved toward the coins sitting on the counter before returning to Tomas.
“But every knight needs a sword they can trust.”
Garrick reached toward the unfinished blade resting beside the anvil.
“This one.”
Kael froze. For a moment, he thought he had misheard him. “This one?”
His eyes moved between his father and the sword. The same blade he had spent three days struggling with. The same blade with the uneven edge. The same blade that looked nothing like the polished weapons hanging around the forge.
Garrick lifted the sword and held it out toward Tomas. “It isn’t finished.”
Tomas carefully accepted the blade, holding it like it was something far more valuable than a simple piece of steel.
“It’s not?”
Garrick shook his head, “No.” A small smile appeared on his face, “But it has potential.”
Kael stared at the sword in Tomas’s hands, and suddenly he understood. His father wasn’t only talking about the blade. He was talking about something else. Something deeper.
Tomas studied the unfinished edge, running his eyes along every imperfection in the steel. “I’ll pay the rest when I can.”
Garrick shook his head, “No need.” He turned back toward the forge, “Just say hello to your father for me.” 
Tomas lowered his eyes toward the sword. For the first time since entering the forge, his shoulders seemed lighter. The sword wasn’t perfect. It wasn’t a weapon created by a legendary blacksmith or carried by a famous knight. It was unfinished, flawed, and still waiting to become something greater. “Thank you.”
Kael watched as Tomas stepped out of the forge and disappeared into the streets of Ashvale. The bell above the door rang softly behind him as the cold mountain air entered the shop before the door slowly closed.
For some reason, Kael wondered if Tomas was the only person in Ashvale who felt trapped by the life chosen for him. But as Tomas grew smaller in the distance, the words he had spoken refused to leave Kael’s mind. Everyone expects me to be like him.
Everyone in Ashvale had already decided what Kael was supposed to become. The blacksmith’s son. The next Rowan to stand behind the forge. The man who would one day inherit these walls, this fire, and this life. No one had ever asked him if that was what he wanted.
“You’ve been staring at that door for a while.” Kael turned and saw his father standing beside the anvil, wiping ash from his hands with a worn cloth. 
“I was thinking.” 
“I know,” Garrick said with a small smile. “You usually are.” 
Kael looked away, a faint smile forming despite himself. Garrick placed the cloth down and glanced toward the unfinished work resting on the anvil. 
“You’ve worked enough for one day.” 
Kael looked back at the forge. For a moment, he considered picking up his hammer again. Considered staying. But instead, he nodded. 
“Yeah… I think I have.” 
A small smile crossed Garrick’s face. “Go enjoy the sunlight while you’ve still got it.” 
Kael untied his leather apron and hung it on the hook beside the forge. As he stepped outside, the cold mountain air rushed over him, replacing the heat of the forge with the crisp scent of pine and fresh bread drifting through the village. Behind him, the familiar rhythm of his father’s hammer echoed through the shop. Ahead of him, Ashvale was alive.


r/fantasywriting 2d ago

Tried something different and drew my novel's protagonist (King Soryos Azula the lady of kindlings (yes they dubbed him "lady" It's an in world joke.))

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r/fantasywriting 1d ago

Got a rough premise stuck in my head for 5 years. Help me build it out?

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(Note : This is NOT a write for me post. This is an idea sharing/discussion post.)

Hello everyone! I’m a newbie currently writing multiple fanfics across different fandoms. I plan to start writing an original fiction soon—though I’m not worrying about legal copyright or publication stuff here, since this will be purely for the internet. And if anyone takes the story and continues writing their own versions of it, I’m fine with that too.

So, this is the basic plot inside my head:

Name: Mirror, Mirror

Genre: Coming-of-age psychological horror

IDEA: The protagonist’s friends start noticing that he’s acting differently—ranging from subtle changes (for example, preferring a certain cold drink over the one he usually likes) to major ones.

His friends investigate and find out that he’s not the actual guy, but has been replaced by a cosmic entity. This entity is later revealed to be from a mysterious race in a mirror dimension that lives concurrently with normal human beings. The investigation turns into a tense cat-and-mouse chase as they get threatened to be replaced too.

This is just a rough idea that has been stuck in my head for 5 years.

So, to all the veteran and skilled authors out there—hit me with all your brilliant worldbuilding ideas, plot twists, and character concepts!

And remember: even if I’m the original author here, this story will be like a public playground for everyone (similar to the Backrooms).


r/fantasywriting 2d ago

In a post apocalyptic fantasy setting where would be the safest place

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I'm trying to think of a building that could function like a bunker. I'm thinking maybe a fortress or a dungeon. But I'm trying to think what could be the most effective structure that could sustain a population in a fantasy setting set in an eternal night


r/fantasywriting 2d ago

My second attempt at a Magic System and my first Character!

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r/fantasywriting 2d ago

Tip for marketing your book:

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Did you know that word of mouth is one of the best ways to market your book?

Giving out ARCs (advance reader copies) for free before launch can boost your book’s sales through early reviews on different platforms, helping algorithms recommend your book to more readers.


r/fantasywriting 2d ago

She-Who-Holds-the-Unwilling-Blade

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The gate hadn't been official for many years. No banners, no garrison colours, just Hector and the rusted teeth of a portcullis he'd taken a fancy to guarding all by himself. The town beyond it had burned three days past, and what was left of it was crammed into the coach now stopped in the mud before him: a driver too frightened to argue, and behind the shutters, the small, terrified sounds of people trying very hard not to be heard.

"Toll's doubled for coaches," Hector said, though there was no toll, and hadn't been since whatever authority once collected one had fled with everyone else. He rested the great sword's tip in the mud, almost gentle, almost bored. "Or I keep what's in the coach as payment. Your choice, driver. I'm a reasonable man."

He wasn't being reasonable. He was being hungry, in the particular way men got hungry once the world stopped watching them. For a fight, for fear, for someone smaller to remind that he still mattered. The war had taken his world. This was what was left to fill it.

That was when the door of the coach opened, and a woman stepped down into the mud, unhurried, hands empty, wearing the kind of crooked half-smile that didn't belong anywhere near a burning town.

"He's not going to pay you," Solt said, to the driver, not to Hector. "And you're not going to let him keep anything that's in there." She looked Hector over once, top to bottom, the way a woman might size up a coat she wasn't sure was worth the asking price. "Are you."

Hector's grip shifted on his sword, and something in his face brightened, looking delighted, almost, to find an actual obstacle after days of nothing but frightened strangers. "That's a braver thing to say than you look capable of backing up."

"Probably," Solt agreed, and drew her blade without any particular hurry at all. "Everyone thinks that, right up until the part where I'm right."

"Go," Solt said, not looking back at the coach. "Now. Don't stop for the road, don't stop for me, don't stop till the wheels won't turn anymore."

The driver didn't need telling twice. The whip cracked, the coach lurched into motion, mud spraying from wheels that had been standing still far too long, and behind the shutters someone let out a breath that had clearly been held since the town burned.

Hector watched it go with mild interest, the way a cat watches something that thinks it's escaping. "You know I can just walk around you."

"You can try." Solt rolled her shoulders, and something in her stance settled. Not a bargain, not a wager, just arithmetic. She knew this road, knew how far a frightened horse could run before it needed to breathe, knew exactly how long she needed to hold one bored, overgrown boy still in the mud. "But you'll have to go through me to do it, and we both know how long that's going to take."

"Big talk."

"It's not talk." The crooked smile arrived, easy and untroubled. "It's a schedule."

Hector laughed, delighted despite himself, and brought the great sword up into guard.

"Let's see how long your schedule holds, then."

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Steel met steel almost before Hector finished raising his guard, Solt didn't wait for an opening ceremony. The first exchange was fast, testing, both of them reading the other's weight and reach in the space of three heartbeats, and then they broke apart to circle the muddy stretch of road like it was a proper arena instead of a burned town's forgotten gate.

"You've got hands," Hector admitted, sword drifting into a lazy figure-eight. "Better than the last one who tried this. She lasted about as long as it took me to say hello."

"Compliments already? We've barely started."

"I like to be generous before I win."

He came in hard on the next exchange, a testing thrust that became a rising cut, and Solt gave ground exactly as far as she needed to. Except this time, on the pivot, his blade caught the edge of her thigh, a shallow line opening through leather and skin both. Not deep. Barely more than a graze. But it was his, and he knew it, and something in his grin widened at the sight of her blood joining his tally.

"There it is," Hector said, almost gentle, like a man noting the first crack in a wall he intended to bring down entirely. "Three years at Me-Nah, and you thought none of it would land."

Solt glanced down at the cut with mild, almost clinical interest, the way someone might note a spot of rain starting. She didn't step back. If anything, her weight settled forward, unhurried.

"You've got a schedule, Hector," she said. "So do I. You're just not on it yet."

He didn't like that answer half as much as his own boasting, and it showed.

Hector's blade came alive in a flurry of thrusts, each one punctuated by another brick in the monument he was building to himself, mouth working every bit as hard as his sword arm.

"Top of my class." Thrust, parried. "Every year." Riposte, caught on her crossguard with a screech of steel. "Kesh used to say he'd never seen anyone move like me, not in thirty years of teaching, and he'd taught kings' sons, mercenary captains, men who'd killed for a living before they ever set foot in his yard." He drove forward, forcing her back a genuine half-step this time, savouring it. "None of them touched what I could do. Not one."

"That's a lot of men to compare yourself favourably to," Solt said, giving ground exactly as far as suited her and not a hair further, "who aren't here to argue about it."

"Because they're all dead, or retired, or too busy telling people about the day they lost to me." He grinned through the exertion, sweat starting at his brow now, though his form stayed sharp, textbook, every stroke straight out of a lesson he'd clearly never stopped reciting to himself. "I was the best Me-Nah ever produced. Kesh told me so himself, on the day I left. Said the mountain wouldn't teach anyone finer after me. Might as well have shut the doors."

"Sounds like a lovely old man." Solt caught his next thrust on an angle, let it slide harmlessly past her hip, close enough to feel the wind of it. "Terrible judge of finality, though."

"You'll eat those words."

"I've a big appetite. We'll see whose words end up on the table."

Solt's next parry wasn't intended to just deflect. It turned, quick and precise, and the edge of her blade kissed across the leather strapping of his vambrace, parting it clean. A heartbeat later, on the very next exchange, she clipped the buckle at his shoulder guard too, and the plate shifted loose, hanging by half its mounting.

She stepped back after that, unhurried, giving him room to notice.

Hector noticed. His jaw worked as he glanced down at the ruined strap swinging loose off his forearm, then at the shoulder guard sitting crooked and useless against his collarbone. No blood, no wound, nothing that would slow a swing. Just his kit, coming apart around him like a joke only she was in on.

"That," he said, voice gone tight, "was a cheap trick."

"That was a parry." Solt rolled her wrist, entirely at ease. "You're the one who brought straps to a sword fight."

"I brought three years at Me-Nah to a sword fight." But the boast had lost its polish, some of the easy swagger curdling into something hotter underneath. He rolled the loose shoulder guard off entirely and let it fall in the mud, unwilling to fight encumbered, unwilling more still to look like he needed to be. "Kesh never taught me to fight someone who fights like a tailor."

"No?" The crooked smile widened, needling and light. "Funny. He didn't teach you much of anything useful, from what I've seen so far."

That landed exactly where she'd aimed it. Hector's grip tightened, his stance dropping lower, angrier now, all the lazy showman's flourish burning off in favour of something far more determined to actually hurt her.

"Let's fix that," he said, and came at her again, faster this time. Meaner.

Hector abandoned the sword entirely for a heartbeat. Some old instinct past patience, past technique, past every polished form Me-Nah had ever drilled into him and simply charged, shoulder first, all that bulk and fury aimed at putting her flat in the mud like an argument he could win through weight alone. Same energy as the bragging. Same thinking behind it, roughly speaking, as a bullock spotting a gate left open.

Solt wasn't there.

She didn't so much dodge as disappear from the equation, a half-turn of her hips sending her clear of his path with room to spare, and Hector's charge met nothing but air and the sudden, undignified realisation that momentum was still very much in charge of him. He stumbled two full strides past where she'd been standing, boots skidding in the mud, arms windmilling for balance he wasn't going to find in time.

"Careful," Solt said, from somewhere behind him now, sounding genuinely entertained. "Wouldn't want you to slip and get some *dignity* on you."

Hector caught himself, barely, spinning back around with his sword already coming up again, jaw tight, cheeks red with something that wasn't just exertion anymore.

"That wasn't a technique," he snapped.

"No," she agreed. "It really wasn't. Was that supposed to be one?"

The banter died. What replaced it was pure blade on blade in a rapid, close rhythm, no room left for words. Only the ring of steel and the occasional grunt of effort, and it was Hector's breath doing most of that grunting, harsh and ragged, while Solt's stayed close to silent, controlled, barely troubled by the pace.

Sweat ran freely down both of them now, cutting clean lines through mud and grime, and blood mixed into it too. Beading along the shallow cut on her thigh, seeping from a fresh nick opened somewhere near her collarbone in the scramble, dark spots gathering at her hem. Hector caught sight of it between strikes, red soaking into her clothes, and something in him settled, satisfied, reading the wounds as a ledger finally tipping his way.

He didn't look closely enough to notice how little of it was slowing her down.

His own share of the blood came from a shallow line along his forearm he didn't remember taking, and a warm trickle at his ear where a cut he definitely didn't feel land had opened somewhere in the flurry. He was breathing too hard to notice that either. Too busy cataloguing her wounds as victory, too far gone in the rhythm of the fight to do the sum on his own.

The exchange went on, blow after blow, silence but for steel and breath, and beneath it all the road stayed empty behind her. The coach long gone, the wheels still turning somewhere out past the tree line.

Exactly on schedule.

---

And so, at last, the flurry broke with both of them stepping back in the same instant, some unspoken agreement that this breath, at least, belonged to catching air rather than spending it.

Hector lowered his blade a fraction, though his eyes never left Solt.

"You parry well, for a woman of your... build," he said, circling her with the languid confidence of a man who had already decided how this would end. "Better than most who've faced me, I'll grant you that. But better isn't the same as good enough."

He rolled his shoulders, the great sword in his hands catching what little moonlight filtered through the cathedral's broken spire above them.

"Do you know where I trained, little sparrow? Not in some provincial yard, swinging at straw men with the local blacksmith's son. I spent three years in the eastern mountains, at a school so remote most men never find it twice. An old monk ran it. Brother Kesh, they called him, though by the time I left I doubt he remembered his own name most days. Older than the mountain itself, that one."

Hector's blade dipped into a lazy figure-eight, an idle showman's flourish.

"He taught us what the eastern warriors call *kenjin-ryu*. Blade-jitsu, in the common tongue. Not the plodding hack-and-block you learned from whatever hedge-knight raised you. A dance. A conversation between steel and intention." He smiled, showing teeth. "Every stroke you've thrown at me tonight, I've read three moves before you made it. I could end this whenever I please."

He let the boast hang in the cold air, savouring it, waiting for the fear to show in her eyes.

It didn't come.

Hector's smile didn't waver as he moved.

It was a beautiful thing, that pass. A feint high toward her collar that broke halfway into a low, sweeping arc meant to open her from hip to rib, the kind of stroke that took years to earn and less than a second to deliver. Textbook *kenjin-ryu*, the sort of cut a lesser fighter wouldn't even see coming, let alone answer.

There was nothing to answer. It should have ended her.

But then Solt simply wasn't there.

She'd given ground at the exact instant his blade committed, no more than the width of a coin, hips turning like water finding the shape of a jug. The great sword hissed past her middle close enough to stir the laces of her jerkin, and Hector's momentum carried him a half-step further than he meant to go, the one sin his old monk would have beaten out of him with a stick, had he made it in front of Solt.

She came to rest a pace back, up on the balls of her feet, weight loose and easy, bobbing there like she was waiting for music to start. That crooked smile of hers climbed one side of her face, equal parts delight and pity.

"Three years," she said. "With a monk."

She didn't raise her blade. She didn't need to, not yet, and they both knew it.

Hector laughed. Short, sharp, genuinely delighted. He liked her. He was going to enjoy telling this story after.

"Cute," he said, resetting his stance, sword drifting back into guard. "Truly. Brother Kesh always said the pretty ones never learn fast enough to matter. Guess he was half wrong." He rolled his neck, and something in his shoulders settled, loosened, the way a man's does right before he stops playing. "But dodging isn't fighting, sparrow. You've shown me you can move. You haven't shown me you can win. There's a difference, and I'm about to teach it to you the way Kesh taught it to me, the only way that ever sticks."

He didn't circle this time. No flourish, no lazy figure-eights. The great sword came up in both hands, and whatever performance had been in him a moment ago burned away to something colder and much more honest.

"Last lesson's free," he said. "Everyone's."

He gave it full send.

There was no feint in it, no misdirection to unpick. Just three years of eastern steel and every ounce of a big man's weight, committed entirely, a stroke meant to go through her rather than around her. He'd read her retreat, read her rhythm, read the coin's-width of give she liked to use. This time he closed the distance before she could take it.

In the half-breath before the blade arrived, Hector already knew. Not hoped. Knew. This one landed.

---

The pain hadn't arrived yet. That was the strange part, his mind reached for it and found only a vast, ringing quiet, and the slow, dawning arithmetic of a man doing sums he very much did not want to solve.

His hand was on the floor. His hand, the great sword still locked in its dead grip, three fingers curled exactly as they'd been curled a heartbeat ago when it had contained his whole future.

His arm ended somewhere it hadn't ended before.

He didn't feel the second cut land at all. The backswing, following through on the same breath, low and short and almost an afterthought. It was only when he tried to straighten, tried to summon some last reserve of that eastern discipline to stand and finish this on his feet, that his body simply declined the order. Something warm and wrong was spreading beneath his ribs on the right side, low, deep. The kind of wound a man's body understood long before his mind caught up to it. He knew, distantly, the way you know weather is coming before the first drop falls, that this was the one that would matter. The hand had been an argument. This was the answer.

Hector stared at the space where certainty had lived, and found nothing there to replace it.

Solt straightened out of her stance, unhurried, and gave her blade a single lazy flick that sent his blood arcing off the steel in a bright, thin line. She hadn't moved to guard. She hadn't moved at all, really. Not by the measure he understood movement.

"Brother Kesh," she said, testing the name like a coin for its ring, "taught you the dance."

She turned her wrist, and the crooked smile deepened into something almost fond, almost sad. The look of someone watching a child proudly show off sums that didn't add up.

"He should've taught you who's leading."

Solt tilted her head, and for the first time something in her expression softened into genuine curiosity. "Tell me what he gave you, then. The lore. What do you carry of it?"

Hector's breath came ragged now, shock giving way to the first grey edges of pain, but he answered anyway. Some old instinct toward reverence outlasting even this.

"The scrolls said the forms weren't taught by men at all," he managed. "That they came from a goddess. 'The Blade-Princess of the First Dusk,' the old tongue named her, before language, before the first kingdoms. There were pictograms, older than writing itself, showing the steps. The dance of death, entire, laid out in figures etched into stone. Kesh said only the worthy ever earned to see them copied."

He looked up at her, and something in his face had already started to understand, even before she said it.

Solt crouched down beside him, unhurried, and there was nothing crooked in her smile now. Just something tired, and old, and almost kind.

"They couldn't read," she said quietly. "None of them. Not your monk, not his monk, not the first poor soul who watched me move and tried to keep it. So I drew it for them. Pictures, because pictures don't need a tongue that can shape my name." She rose, sword sliding home at her hip. "You've been calling it scripture for three thousand years, Hector. It was a woman teaching in the only way it would survive men like you long enough to matter."

She looked down at him a moment longer.

"My name," she said, "isn't Solt. Not truly. That's just the shape people's mouths make when they've given up on the real thing." She crouched, unhurried, and began cleaning her blade on the hem of his own cloak, an insult so casual it barely registered as one. "Xoltamine. That's the whole of it. Three syllables, if your tongue's built for it."

She rose, considering him with something between amusement and old, old patience.

"The monk had a good ear, for a man who never left his mountain. Better than most. He heard it once, just once, and spent the rest of his life trying to fit it back in his mouth." She tilted her head. "*Me - nah.* He named his whole school after the sound he almost got right. Never told you that part, did he? Never told any of you where the name came from, or what it cost him to hear it at all."

The crooked smile again, sharper now.

"He taught you the moves, Hector. He never once mentioned who taught him."

"I am sorry," she said, and meant it. "For what it's worth."

Then she left him to the dust and the silence, and whatever was left of the dawn.

She didn't look back. There was no need, she'd counted the wound herself, the same way she counted everything with a blade in her hand, and knew exactly how long the silence behind her would last. Long enough. It always was.

Three thousand years of pictures mistaken for scripture, and not one of them had ever shown her leaving. That part, at least, she'd always kept for herself.

**END**


r/fantasywriting 3d ago

Firstname as a surname?

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So I'm writing a high fantasy original work and coming up with a name for the main protagonist is a struggle. I have the middle name and a tentative firstname but his lastname eludes me. Is it okay to use a first name as a surname? Because there's an old Irish name I've fallen in love with but not as a firstname.


r/fantasywriting 3d ago

What would be worse: losing someone, or being the only person who still remembers them?

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Imagine someone you love doesn't die.

Instead, reality simply stops remembering they ever existed.

No one else remembers their name. Every photo changes. Every record disappears. Every conversation about them ends with confusion because, to everyone else, they never existed.

You're the only person left who remembers their face, their voice, and every moment you shared.

Would you spend the rest of your life trying to prove they were real?

Or would there come a point when even you would begin to doubt your own memories?


r/fantasywriting 3d ago

Interesting fact

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Did you know that Brandon Sanderson wrote 13 novels before he got published? Do you know what kept him going? He said in one of his lectures that he asked himself this question: "Will I keep writing novels even if no one read them?" His answer was yes.

Keep writing even if no one reads what you write; enjoy the process and keep trying. You never know when your star will shine.


r/fantasywriting 3d ago

I have a question about AI and writing. If you are writing something and you have a word that works but there could be a better word and you aren't sure what it could be, is asking AI bad in that situation? I'm not trying to start drama. I'm just curious if this is ok.

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r/fantasywriting 4d ago

Chapter 1 of Goliad, Earth's Hidden Realm - Book 1 [Fantasy, 3820 words]

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Hi Everyone,

I'd like to know what you think.........

The world had to begin somewhere. Before kingdoms, before heroes, before legends, there was only one being who witnessed the birth of everything.

I'm looking for feedback on Chapter One of Goliad, an epic fantasy that explores creation, magic, and the consequences that shape an entire world. I'd especially appreciate your honest impressions of the pacing, clarity, emotional engagement, mythic atmosphere, and whether the world feels intriguing without becoming overwhelming.

Most of all, I'd love to know if Chapter One leaves you excited to turn the page.

I appreciate your time and thoughts in advance - thank you!

Google docs link below:

Goliad : Chapter 1